Date: May 10th, 2024 10:43 AM
Author: Dull multi-colored property deer antler
this could've been truly good if you'd gotten the words to match up with the original but yo meter is SHIT
like
if you rike my ramen then put naruto on it, it's 13 syllables like the original but doesn't quite work because the rhythm is thrown off by the three-syllable word
if you rike my ramen then you put chashu on it, 13 syllables, closer to the original rhythm
you could be great, dude, keep working!
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