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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:48 AM Author: navy regret As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376133) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:57 AM Author: Concupiscible Impertinent People Who Are Hurt Piazza "C was seen driving in the X area, with D as a passenger, by both A and B."
(no one gives a fuck whether A and B were driving or doing a standing 69 at the time they saw these faggots) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:01 PM Author: indigo heady brunch therapy they do if its an auto case. Contrib or comparative play a role potentially. Better to keep it clean.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:10 PM Author: Crawly Parlor Queen Of The Night Your sentence doesn't even say that A and B saw C and D, just that they passed them. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377665) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:40 PM Author: Chocolate electric step-uncle's house dingle berry As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42386999) |
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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:42 PM Author: Cobalt spectacular senate fat ankles Subject: Quick fixxx As A and B were driving in X, they passed a car driven by C containing D as a passenger.
EDIT: LMAO at the date |
Date: April 30th, 2021 9:52 AM Author: cracking high-end state philosopher-king “As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C. D was a passenger in C’s car at the time.”
Would break up the sentences. Your original sentence isn’t terrible though. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:53 AM Author: provocative talking clown school cafeteria (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376148) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: navy regret i thought about breaking it up -- it worse because it puts emphasis on "D was a passenger in C’s car at this time" -- which is a minor detail.
it doesn't really matter whether C or D is the driver. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:56 AM Author: cracking high-end state philosopher-king Ah m, okay. For some reason I assumed that D was the main person. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376166) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: navy regret C and D are both involved. I continue to use the term "C's car" for clarity (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376201) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:51 AM Author: Concupiscible Impertinent People Who Are Hurt Piazza "at this time"
ROFL |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:54 AM Author: indigo heady brunch therapy Need to clarify at some point whether A or B were actually driving. Or were they in two separate cars, both of which passed C. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376155) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: cracking high-end state philosopher-king Yeah I just worked with the isolated sentence in question b/c I didn’t know what the surrounding sentences are like. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376160) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:04 AM Author: indigo heady brunch therapy You can do it in another sentence, but it's going to be important to be clear who was driving in the passing car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376205) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: Know-it-all aquamarine lay stain While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car that C was driving with a passenger, D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376157) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:57 AM Author: carnelian hairless roommate nursing home (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376168) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:58 AM Author: Maroon Orchestra Pit Voyeur As A and B were driving separately in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376174) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Domesticated stimulating church building national security agency This suggestion isn't meant to be used word for word, just generally to give you the right idea on how to handle this sort of thing, please develop as part of an exercise in your own development as a lawyer. Really need to break this into clauses that explain everything.
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger.
WHEREAS A, B, C, and D are human persons domiciled in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS X is a certain area in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS A, B, and C are legally authorized to operate motor vehicles ("cars" and each individual such vehicle a "car")
WHEREAS on that certain date, A, B, and C were operating cars.
WHEREAS on that certain date, D was a passenger in the car operated by C.
Now, therefore be it resolved, on that certain date, the aforementioned cars traversed on intersecting paths in Area X.
[I assume by "passed" you mean "passed" as in "they passed by each other while headed in different directions," revise if you mean they were going the same way and A/B's cars passed/overtook C's car.]
Please handle and recirculate, thanks. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: navy regret (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376203) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:45 AM Author: cruel-hearted trip haunted graveyard rehab (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376392) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:08 AM Author: cowardly den partner (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376526) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:25 AM Author: Seedy sandwich hissy fit (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376657) |
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Date: May 4th, 2022 12:40 PM Author: Crimson Office Very clear, no ambiguity, reads like 1st order logic, I like it. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44453959) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Sooty doctorate half-breed As A and B entered the X area, they looked at each other, and although none of them said a word, they understood each other perfectly. It was X area after all. Are there any Xs around, they wondered? They passed a beaten-up vehicle with ridiculous oversized chromed wheels with C as a driver and D as a passenger. X's! - thought A and B. C and D did not think anything. They were high. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376178) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:36 AM Author: doobsian sienna school party of the first part (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376332) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM Author: chrome love of her life space (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376340) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: stubborn mind-boggling scourge upon the earth FRIENDLESS FAGGOT BIRDSHIT A was driving some FAGgOt BIRdshit car alone(some other NIFmGGA was drivomg alone in another car) they passed ALPHA TURD C , who has MANY DRINKING BUDDIES, SO NATURALLY HAD A PASSENGER (most likely an AZNgirl getting wet for MAMMOTH TURDCOCK) (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376183) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM Author: razzle tank (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376187) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: Domesticated stimulating church building national security agency (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376195) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM Author: razzle-dazzle mewling location (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376249) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:47 AM Author: Adventurous Brethren (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376406) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:36 AM Author: Fiercely-loyal aromatic knife bawdyhouse (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376713) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:37 AM Author: cruel-hearted trip haunted graveyard rehab (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376724) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:32 PM Author: arousing zombie-like stage (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377057) |
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Date: May 1st, 2021 12:19 AM Author: razzle tank (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42380818) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: razzle tank As A and B were sucking each other’s cocks in the XXX area, C drove by with D cumming in his ass. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376184) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM Author: provocative talking clown school cafeteria i think you nailed it. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376191) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:36 PM Author: Blathering Mental Disorder Marketing Idea (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42378174) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:00 AM Author: provocative talking clown school cafeteria i hope everyone appreciates the mental illness being performed right now. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376189) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:28 AM Author: Magical Pea-brained Laser Beams Windowlicker (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376669) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: twisted submissive faggot firefighter A and B passed D and C, who was driving. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376194) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM Author: nighttime lake institution (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376341) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:52 AM Author: Concupiscible Impertinent People Who Are Hurt Piazza sounds like a riddle (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376816) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: appetizing sweet tailpipe i hate this crap
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D driving with C. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: navy regret i wish this works and it sounds nice but it seems slightly off (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376206) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: appetizing sweet tailpipe As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D (who was driving with C).
This is it |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:07 AM Author: navy regret doesn't it need "D's car" (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376216) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:42 AM Author: appetizing sweet tailpipe it says he was driving, which means an automobile.
if you think specifying what kind of automobile is a key detail then can add that |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: indigo heady brunch therapy Why do you need B, assuming A was driving. Don't say B was driving. Ever. If he wasnt.
As A was driving, they passed ... |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: Territorial spruce university factory reset button you have to make it more exciting. keep the reader interested.
"Where did this take place? In X. And what happened in X? A and B were together in a car. And what did that car do? Why it passed by another car, a car driven by C. And was C alone in that second car? No, no C was not. C was with D. That's right. A and B passed C and D. It's all true." |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:08 AM Author: apoplectic cruise ship kitty cat Were A and B both at the wheel? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376217) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:13 AM Author: provocative talking clown school cafeteria turns out it was a tandem bicycle. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376233) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:20 AM Author: nighttime lake institution (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376607) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM Author: razzle-dazzle mewling location As some faggot and his friend were driving in the restricted area, they passed a car driven by a nigger and containing some other faggot as a passenger. Regards, I hope this helps. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376246) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:26 AM Author: Insecure Glittery Set Blood Rage The two cars passed in X. In one, A was driving B. In the other, C was driving D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376290) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:29 AM Author: twisted submissive faggot firefighter star crossed lovers. reads like brokeback mountain (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376306) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:31 AM Author: Insecure Glittery Set Blood Rage still the best way to do it. He has more than a handful of items to hit: location, two cars, who was each driver and who was each passenger, that they passed.
This does it and leaves no uncertainty at all |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:34 AM Author: cracking high-end state philosopher-king (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376330) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:35 AM Author: chrome love of her life space Okay? Wow. Hey. Picture this: Cars A and B. Right? Going through section X. *makes large "X" using forearms* And boom! Right there, they pass car C. *makes "C" using hand* A car which, at the time, was containing D *unzips pants* as a passenger. *pulls cock out of fly* Any questions? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376331) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM Author: doobsian sienna school party of the first part (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376336) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:40 AM Author: flickering hairy legs cuck A and B, as was their custom from time to time, were engaged in that most fanciful of modern hobbies, navigation of modern paved roads in a device propelled by an internal combustion engine, whence, they happened to pass by and through the X area. It was delightful that time of year and a welcome respite from their usual tiresome surroundings. And, as fate or chance, or even perhaps the Muses had it, another fellow engaged in the very same hobby happened by. Of course, known to them, and combustion engine navigators the State over, twas C along with D. Both were fair fellows and known to A and B. As custom would insist they happened both to notice and acknowledge each other, hobbyists in the same pursuit as they were. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376358) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:44 AM Author: Soul-stirring trust fund So, we need to talk about A driving around with B. Here's the thing: they were in X area, and what's problematic is they passed by C—yes, THAT C. C had a passenger at the time, D. Here's why that's not okay. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376389) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:47 AM Author: Soul-stirring trust fund Wow (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376411) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:49 AM Author: shaky thriller range I just copied this from a brief. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376419) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:15 AM Author: Adventurous Brethren (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376574) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:54 AM Author: indigo heady brunch therapy Your stuff is the only stuff from here I share w my wife. Every time, I explain that "It's just lawyers--we get bored at work--yeah, I know, that's what makes it funny--" (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376824) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:21 PM Author: red mischievous whorehouse dopamine (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377415) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:00 AM Author: brass crotch (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44008886) |
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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:32 AM Author: Hyperactive Lime Famous Landscape Painting Tattoo (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44722509) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:18 AM Author: cruel-hearted trip haunted graveyard rehab (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376589) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:23 AM Author: Blathering Mental Disorder Marketing Idea (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376641) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:24 AM Author: brass crotch holy shit (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376648) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:34 AM Author: cruel-hearted trip haunted graveyard rehab attn low attention span poasters read this whole thing pls (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376708) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:13 PM Author: twisted submissive faggot firefighter how (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377366) |
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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:36 AM Author: arousing zombie-like stage (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44722527) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:35 AM Author: Domesticated stimulating church building national security agency (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376711) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:00 PM Author: Talented cuckold indirect expression (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376866) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:27 PM Author: Blathering Mental Disorder Marketing Idea (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42378128) |
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Date: June 1st, 2021 9:20 PM Author: Talented cuckold indirect expression (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42558237) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:00 AM Author: brass crotch (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44008882) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:05 AM Author: Talented cuckold indirect expression this is incredible (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44008910) |
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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:39 PM Author: brass crotch (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44032706) |
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Date: May 4th, 2022 12:31 PM Author: Vengeful hall ratface (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44453902) |
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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:31 AM Author: Hyperactive Lime Famous Landscape Painting Tattoo wow (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44722507) |
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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:34 AM Author: red mischievous whorehouse dopamine (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44722517) |
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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:44 AM Author: aphrodisiac ultramarine house internal respiration (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44722548) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:49 AM Author: Bipolar clear tanning salon High | level | legal work (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376422) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:28 AM Author: Magical Pea-brained Laser Beams Windowlicker (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376672) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:55 AM Author: erotic stead Each of A and B were driving in AREA. They both passed a car driven by C with D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376456) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:05 AM Author: mauve very tactful faggotry filthpig A and B passed a car driven by C, who was transporting D as a passenger, as they drove through the X area. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376505) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:07 AM Author: Citrine curious place of business abode two people, a & b, drove past c driving with d in his car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376517) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:13 AM Author: bat-shit-crazy immigrant resort C and his passenger D were traveling in X area. A overtook and passed them. B overtook and passed them too. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376555) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:19 AM Author: wonderful newt theatre As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C, which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376600) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:24 AM Author: Bright irradiated kitchen Haven’t read any of the replies, so someone else may have made the same suggestion, but I’d go with:
While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car containing C (driver) and D (passenger). |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:27 AM Author: Blathering Mental Disorder Marketing Idea This was basically gromjoh's poast above except his was more concise. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376665) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:34 AM Author: brass crotch (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376704) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:40 AM Author: Domesticated stimulating church building national security agency (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376736) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:08 PM Author: shaky thriller range (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377648) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:01 AM Author: brass crotch (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44008887) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:33 AM Author: Sable Sinister Sound Barrier Pit writing MFE's, any resources on improving clunky writing? I recently jumped from GOV to tech (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376695) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:33 AM Author: Domesticated stimulating church building national security agency Did you try the hydro hack? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376699) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:40 AM Author: titillating market What’s that (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376738) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:41 AM Author: Domesticated stimulating church building national security agency You should drink more water, you're probably dehydrated. This will, among other things, improve cognitive function and therefore improve your writing. While you're at it also check your posture I bet you're slouching right now. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376746) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:49 AM Author: cruel-hearted trip haunted graveyard rehab (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42376800) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:17 PM Author: Fantasy-prone Duck-like Chad Just write in the active voice with short simple sentences, subject verb object. Not hard (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377389) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:16 PM Author: Fantasy-prone Duck-like Chad A and B saw C driving in X (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377381) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:28 PM Author: mildly autistic masturbator azn andy and brad were driving around brooklyn when they passed carl and dave in their car.
this doesn't define who is driving and who is riding though.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:38 PM Author: 180 athletic conference dog poop I am gay (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42377484) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:36 PM Author: Blathering Mental Disorder Marketing Idea great thread (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42378176) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:39 PM Author: hot hunting ground Shitty writing is putting too much into one sentence. A and B were driving in the X area. [query: are they both driving separate cars?] C driving D passed them. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 8:29 PM Author: Territorial spruce university factory reset button A and C, drivers, were in different cars, driving through area X, and with them were B and D, passengers; B was with A while D was with C; A and B passed by C and D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42379691) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:50 PM Author: Territorial spruce university factory reset button (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42387061) |
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Date: May 23rd, 2021 3:44 PM Author: Territorial spruce university factory reset button (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42509184) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:36 PM Author: Domesticated stimulating church building national security agency Where are we on this? Thank (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#42386977) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:06 AM Author: Beady-eyed chartreuse multi-billionaire As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C in which D was a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44008916) |
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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:44 PM Author: Concupiscible Impertinent People Who Are Hurt Piazza OP, does this help? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44032743) |
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Date: June 22nd, 2022 9:32 AM Author: orchid circlehead i don't think anyone reads shitlaw shitpaper so it doesn't matter. aren't state court judges borderline retarded? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#44722512) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:23 PM Author: carnelian hairless roommate nursing home (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827186) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:42 PM Author: Beady-eyed chartreuse multi-billionaire "and containing D as" -> "in which D was", otherwise fine (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827205) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 1:15 PM Author: nighttime lake institution Lots of helpful suggestions in this thread but I’m not sure we’ve got it figured out just yet. Let’s put a pin in it and move on. OP: what’s the next sentence? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827228) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 2:57 PM Author: carnelian hairless roommate nursing home (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2Reputation#49827363) |