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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:48 AM Author: Canary Soul-stirring Faggotry Community Account As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376133) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:57 AM Author: multi-colored friendly grandma base "C was seen driving in the X area, with D as a passenger, by both A and B."
(no one gives a fuck whether A and B were driving or doing a standing 69 at the time they saw these faggots) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 12:01 PM Author: cruel-hearted clear travel guidebook spot they do if its an auto case. Contrib or comparative play a role potentially. Better to keep it clean.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 2:10 PM Author: Gold big orchestra pit Your sentence doesn't even say that A and B saw C and D, just that they passed them. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42377665) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:40 PM Author: sienna school cafeteria As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42386999) |
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Date: February 25th, 2022 1:42 PM Author: hilarious deer antler weed whacker Subject: Quick fixxx As A and B were driving in X, they passed a car driven by C containing D as a passenger.
EDIT: LMAO at the date |
Date: April 30th, 2021 9:52 AM Author: misunderstood jap “As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C. D was a passenger in C’s car at the time.”
Would break up the sentences. Your original sentence isn’t terrible though. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:53 AM Author: ruby motley organic girlfriend center (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376148) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: Canary Soul-stirring Faggotry Community Account i thought about breaking it up -- it worse because it puts emphasis on "D was a passenger in C’s car at this time" -- which is a minor detail.
it doesn't really matter whether C or D is the driver. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:56 AM Author: misunderstood jap Ah m, okay. For some reason I assumed that D was the main person. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376166) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: Canary Soul-stirring Faggotry Community Account C and D are both involved. I continue to use the term "C's car" for clarity (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376201) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:51 AM Author: multi-colored friendly grandma base "at this time"
ROFL |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:54 AM Author: cruel-hearted clear travel guidebook spot Need to clarify at some point whether A or B were actually driving. Or were they in two separate cars, both of which passed C. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376155) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: misunderstood jap Yeah I just worked with the isolated sentence in question b/c I didn’t know what the surrounding sentences are like. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376160) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:04 AM Author: cruel-hearted clear travel guidebook spot You can do it in another sentence, but it's going to be important to be clear who was driving in the passing car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376205) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:55 AM Author: razzle scourge upon the earth tattoo While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car that C was driving with a passenger, D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376157) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:57 AM Author: Medicated Self-absorbed Jew Whorehouse (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376168) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:58 AM Author: Pale Property As A and B were driving separately in the X area, they passed a car driven by C which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376174) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: hairless hall This suggestion isn't meant to be used word for word, just generally to give you the right idea on how to handle this sort of thing, please develop as part of an exercise in your own development as a lawyer. Really need to break this into clauses that explain everything.
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C and containing D as a passenger.
WHEREAS A, B, C, and D are human persons domiciled in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS X is a certain area in Jurisdiction Y
WHEREAS A, B, and C are legally authorized to operate motor vehicles ("cars" and each individual such vehicle a "car")
WHEREAS on that certain date, A, B, and C were operating cars.
WHEREAS on that certain date, D was a passenger in the car operated by C.
Now, therefore be it resolved, on that certain date, the aforementioned cars traversed on intersecting paths in Area X.
[I assume by "passed" you mean "passed" as in "they passed by each other while headed in different directions," revise if you mean they were going the same way and A/B's cars passed/overtook C's car.]
Please handle and recirculate, thanks. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:03 AM Author: Canary Soul-stirring Faggotry Community Account (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376203) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:45 AM Author: Chest-beating hyperventilating affirmative action associate (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376392) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:25 AM Author: glassy set (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376657) |
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Date: May 4th, 2022 12:40 PM Author: Naked lavender persian Very clear, no ambiguity, reads like 1st order logic, I like it. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#44453959) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Curious Kitty Cat Laser Beams As A and B entered the X area, they looked at each other, and although none of them said a word, they understood each other perfectly. It was X area after all. Are there any Xs around, they wondered? They passed a beaten-up vehicle with ridiculous oversized chromed wheels with C as a driver and D as a passenger. X's! - thought A and B. C and D did not think anything. They were high. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376178) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:36 AM Author: mischievous indigo really tough guy stage (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376332) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM Author: appetizing legal warrant site (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376340) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: ivory impertinent locale FRIENDLESS FAGGOT BIRDSHIT A was driving some FAGgOt BIRdshit car alone(some other NIFmGGA was drivomg alone in another car) they passed ALPHA TURD C , who has MANY DRINKING BUDDIES, SO NATURALLY HAD A PASSENGER (most likely an AZNgirl getting wet for MAMMOTH TURDCOCK) (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376183) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: hairless hall (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376195) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM Author: Navy multi-billionaire halford (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376249) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:47 AM Author: Zippy Theater (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376406) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:36 AM Author: French native sound barrier (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376713) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:37 AM Author: Chest-beating hyperventilating affirmative action associate (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376724) |
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Date: May 1st, 2021 12:19 AM Author: Crimson state antidepressant drug (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42380818) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 9:59 AM Author: Crimson state antidepressant drug As A and B were sucking each other’s cocks in the XXX area, C drove by with D cumming in his ass. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376184) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: Vibrant Spruce University Fat Ankles A and B passed D and C, who was driving. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376194) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:37 AM Author: marvelous abode (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376341) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:52 AM Author: multi-colored friendly grandma base sounds like a riddle (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376816) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:01 AM Author: Mahogany private investor i hate this crap
As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D driving with C. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: Canary Soul-stirring Faggotry Community Account i wish this works and it sounds nice but it seems slightly off (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376206) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: Mahogany private investor As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed by D (who was driving with C).
This is it |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:07 AM Author: Canary Soul-stirring Faggotry Community Account doesn't it need "D's car" (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376216) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:42 AM Author: Mahogany private investor it says he was driving, which means an automobile.
if you think specifying what kind of automobile is a key detail then can add that |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:05 AM Author: cruel-hearted clear travel guidebook spot Why do you need B, assuming A was driving. Don't say B was driving. Ever. If he wasnt.
As A was driving, they passed ... |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:06 AM Author: dead green school you have to make it more exciting. keep the reader interested.
"Where did this take place? In X. And what happened in X? A and B were together in a car. And what did that car do? Why it passed by another car, a car driven by C. And was C alone in that second car? No, no C was not. C was with D. That's right. A and B passed C and D. It's all true." |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:08 AM Author: Azure Gaped Hell Cuckoldry Were A and B both at the wheel? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376217) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:20 AM Author: marvelous abode (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376607) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:18 AM Author: Navy multi-billionaire halford As some faggot and his friend were driving in the restricted area, they passed a car driven by a nigger and containing some other faggot as a passenger. Regards, I hope this helps. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376246) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:26 AM Author: twinkling quadroon business firm The two cars passed in X. In one, A was driving B. In the other, C was driving D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376290) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:31 AM Author: twinkling quadroon business firm still the best way to do it. He has more than a handful of items to hit: location, two cars, who was each driver and who was each passenger, that they passed.
This does it and leaves no uncertainty at all |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:34 AM Author: misunderstood jap (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376330) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:44 AM Author: Rose Liquid Oxygen So, we need to talk about A driving around with B. Here's the thing: they were in X area, and what's problematic is they passed by C—yes, THAT C. C had a passenger at the time, D. Here's why that's not okay. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376389) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:45 AM Author: jade meetinghouse 400 km/h, 450 km/h, 500 km/h, 550 km/h; A could feel the force of the acceleration pressing him against the sport bucket seats of his Turbo Allegra Mk. 2, their soft, well-sourced alcantara cosseting his tightly leather chapped legs, the micromechanical motors within instantaneously adjusting to each minor perturbation in the vehicle's three-axis orientation to keep him perfectly balanced, its SWIFT systems scanning kilometers ahead of them in real-time and predictively modulating the various electromagnetic and anti-kinetic shielding systems in order to protect their passage as they rocketed upward toward the gateway to area X--area X, the Sacred Seat of Cybernetic Heaven, its secrets whispering to the hovels of his birthplace below, beckoning brave boys with the Siren Song: "Come, Unlock Our Treasurehosue of Wonder or Die Trying"; "It's a goddamn marvel--" that was B, his copilot jockey, in the seat beside him--he'd always liked the tech stuff, engineered things were his jig and jive and the natural knack he'd expressed for them had been evident since his Fourth Year when he'd spontaneously programmed a molecular excavator during off time while the rest of the class was at the playground; he and B had been practicing for this for over three years, secretive sessions when the sensor rings slipped from alignment every third week on Sunday for maintena--"we have a fucking BOGEY at 3 o'clock HIGH!" B screamed, interrupting his meditation on the past--the systems of the Allegra were fast, but B was faster and he'd spotted the incoming a split second before the computerized indication of the same: "Warning, SWIFT has detected an intrusion in the third--" he cut off the computer; he knew what he needed to know: C was moving to intercept them in his Outrigger, accompanied by D; they'd planned for this eventuality, both the conflict itself and the psychology of facing your own brother and cousin 45 kilometers up in the air, each precise maneuver tiptoeing on the razor thin edge between life and death, a minute miscalculation capable of throwing you off the wrong side into a fiery midair death--there was something poignant about it, the notion that he could die up here in an instant and to his friends and family in the warrens of Bressville below, toiling through their daily tasks with no comprehension of the enormous aerial pageantry above them, his life could blot out with no greater signifier than a vanishing spot of light in the sky; he banished the thought of this and other things as he shouted in the cockpit "let's smoke these fuckers" and pushed down hard on the throttle, the frame of the Allegra bending, straining, complying with the command as they soared to meet the enemy head on, he and B laughing aloud at the thrill of it all. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376393) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 10:55 AM Author: heady address Each of A and B were driving in AREA. They both passed a car driven by C with D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376456) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:05 AM Author: ebony rigpig nursing home A and B passed a car driven by C, who was transporting D as a passenger, as they drove through the X area. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376505) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:07 AM Author: Vigorous zombie-like ticket booth queen of the night two people, a & b, drove past c driving with d in his car. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376517) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:13 AM Author: supple tanning salon famous landscape painting C and his passenger D were traveling in X area. A overtook and passed them. B overtook and passed them too. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376555) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:19 AM Author: excitant box office love of her life As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C, which contained D as a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376600) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:24 AM Author: mind-boggling corner Haven’t read any of the replies, so someone else may have made the same suggestion, but I’d go with:
While driving in the X area, A & B passed a car containing C (driver) and D (passenger). |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:27 AM Author: Stirring opaque trump supporter This was basically gromjoh's poast above except his was more concise. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376665) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 11:41 AM Author: hairless hall You should drink more water, you're probably dehydrated. This will, among other things, improve cognitive function and therefore improve your writing. While you're at it also check your posture I bet you're slouching right now. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42376746) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:17 PM Author: Internet-worthy headpube Just write in the active voice with short simple sentences, subject verb object. Not hard (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42377389) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:16 PM Author: Internet-worthy headpube A and B saw C driving in X (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42377381) |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 1:28 PM Author: walnut lay andy and brad were driving around brooklyn when they passed carl and dave in their car.
this doesn't define who is driving and who is riding though.
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Date: April 30th, 2021 3:39 PM Author: crusty shimmering hospital Shitty writing is putting too much into one sentence. A and B were driving in the X area. [query: are they both driving separate cars?] C driving D passed them. |
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Date: April 30th, 2021 8:29 PM Author: dead green school A and C, drivers, were in different cars, driving through area X, and with them were B and D, passengers; B was with A while D was with C; A and B passed by C and D. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42379691) |
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Date: May 2nd, 2021 12:50 PM Author: dead green school (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42387061) |
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Date: May 23rd, 2021 3:44 PM Author: dead green school (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#42509184) |
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Date: February 22nd, 2022 10:06 AM Author: emerald partner As A and B were driving in the X area, they passed a car driven by C in which D was a passenger. (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#44008916) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 12:42 PM Author: emerald partner "and containing D as" -> "in which D was", otherwise fine (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#49827205) |
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Date: April 19th, 2026 1:15 PM Author: marvelous abode Lots of helpful suggestions in this thread but I’m not sure we’ve got it figured out just yet. Let’s put a pin in it and move on. OP: what’s the next sentence? (http://www.autoadmit.com/thread.php?thread_id=4823221&forum_id=2\u0026mark_id=5310907#49827228) |
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